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kenn_erason for Mathias Rockwind
Mathias Rockwind:
(Saluting) Mathias Rockwind sir! I've been assigned to guard Princess Anastasia and Sir Nicholas on their mission. I have been trained by General Lux himself and he has approved of my ability to be a vital part of your protection. (a little bit offended but trying to act cool) Rear guard? I assure you, I am capable of handling my own in battle.
(Announcing himself bravely) I, Mathias Rockwind will save you! (His attack misses) You are truly a foe that can match me in battle! I am honored to fight you this day of days! (Almost gets stabbed, then boasts) Woah!....Ha! You're attack has been rendered useless. I am the victor on this battlefield!!
(screaming like an idiot, crying a little too) AHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!! Stay away from me!!! I don't want your love! No! Stay away! STAY AWAY!!!!! *cries profusely*
Woah slow down there boy, it sound like we're listening to it on fast forward. O.x Second, where's the emotion? The inflection? People don't speak like there's a cue card in front of them. They speak from their heart. Well most do anyway. >_>
Apologies, if you're referring to the first line (which I assume you are because I read that one without much of any direction other than he was saluting so I assumed he was rattling off some stuff to a superior officer, most people in the military tend to talk fast (if possible I would like to know more the context of the scene so I can apply some appropriate inflection), if you're referring to the other lines I apologize I thought I had the proper inflection and tone.
To be honest, I think it was highly due to the speed at which you do it. It doesn't leave much room for feeling any emotion. Basically in the first line he is addressing the people he is about to guard. He has been placed there by General Lux. They don't know Mathias has zero experience out in the real world. Also Mathias is very naive and a bit dumb. He never really excelled at academics.