I'm excited to see how this project turns out! I know it's a bit close to the deadline but I'm always down for pointers and critique if you have any!
Hey there Carl! You're doing fantastic work, keep it up, man! Advice or critique for ya? I'd say.... Make sure you're ending on a strong note, emphasizing the line and giving clarity to the emotion. An example being on the sentence, "Is the Hylian our prince brought to the Domain the Hylian Champion from 100 years ago?" Make that sound more like a question, a surprised question! Give that line and others like it some life!Again, fantastic work dude!