[ AUDIO DRAMA ] A General's Allegory ( Will be uploaded on Youtube! )
MarianneBray for Amira
This village girl is the daughter of the Village Cheftain. I also need someone who can yell for this one.
"Daddy told me not to trust strangers. But you're an exception!"
*sobbing* "I wanna go home..."
(In distress)(1) "Help me!"(2) *Scream as if you're getting taken away by bandits.*
Perfect! You've landed yourself on the consideration list! Exceptional tone and delivery on the first and second lines! The only tiny problem is that the last line feels a little bit too smooth and too 'calm' to be realistic. It doesn't seem like the character is trying to struggle.
I can do another take, if you like. (I won't be able to get it to you until Monday, though)
No problem. It is just criticism, and I don't necessarily oblige you to make another. However, if you feel that it may be lacking, then feel free to resend another!