[ AUDIO DRAMA ] A General's Allegory ( Will be uploaded on Youtube! )
MarianneBray for Setnava Cloverfield (Set-nah-vah)
Mid-tone voice required, similar to Yandere Simulator's character (Yandere-chan). She is the main heroine.
(After finding out an obvious lie, you are amused.)
(1) (mild laugh) "What is this..?"
( Your apprentice stumbles in training, and is worried of your remark.)
(2) "Were you expecting a motivational speech? Continue."( Leading a battalion. )(1)* "Onward!"(2)* "Forward!"(3)* (Yell as if you are swinging a long, heavy weapon). (Do this three times, as if the character is doing two consecutive attacks, finished by one, hard finishing blow). (Adding sound effects may increase your likelihood of getting taken in).
( Setnava breaks character after an embarrassing fact, and she tries to get back into character immediately... and fails. ) [Also, please don't pull of a Tsundere impression. I need her to be authentically ashamed of herself.]
(1)* "W-what?! I NEVER liked anything so preposterous such as that! Besides, it's not about which one is more fluffier or fattier! You've got no eye for plushy little rabbi... mh--! *trails off, realizing that she had just revealed her guilty fondness of such critters**[rabbits]*(Engaged in calm conversation, this is where she tries to 'open up').(2)* "If you thought that I'd leave you alone, then you've probably mistaken me for someone else." (confident, sweet)(3)* "Well, the truth is... I was never the trusty type. I've had my fair share of betrayals."
Very good try, the maturity of your tone fits the character very much! However, I could not see the the depth of her character with the way the lines were delivered. It was as if there was only one dimension of her character being conveyed. I am searching for a voice that hides itself in a facade while saying the first lines, and the soft interior revealing itself in the third lines. You can do it!