You sound very expressive and your general tone gives off real friendly vibes, like I'm talking to a hometown homie. I think your cadence could use a bit more work as in some places it did sound a bit like you forgot what you were gonna say but overall I like this take dude!

HW REVIEW

Hey Jeremy, sounds like some rough work! I appreciate you taking the time to record and submit the HW this week despite your busy schedule. Hope you can find some rest on the side soon!

Now onto your review~

I'll echo what Blackpurist has said. I agree! You have a very nice casual tone. That works well with a commercial script when you don't want to sound like you're just selling something. Personable tones are often sought after in commercial work. With some polishing, you'll probably find yourself falling into that genre pretty comfortably!

Some improvement could be made to your projection levels. You definitely hit the mark in a few areas, but your consistency with that projection doesn't hold firm throughout the entirety of the script.

You have a pretty good grasp on your breath control through most of the script! You take natural pauses to breath, and your pacing is maintained in a way so that you don't run out of breath in odd places. You only start wavering on your breath control towards the end of the script (understandable, this is a pretty chunky read!).

Continue the breathing practices every day and focus on your projection. Feel your diaphragm when you speak and push out air. I also recommend finding some power ballads to listen to so you can hear how the singers use their diaphragms when they are projecting.

Good luck with your long shifts! I look forward to listening to your next HW submission!