Passage of the Wanderer: A Firnuvan Tale
cordeux for The Wanderer
The definitive player character. Woke up in the middle of the Nimekal Woods alongside an unconscious Lumiya with no memory of the preceding events beforehand or even knowledge of the universe around them. They’re guided and defined by the choices actually made by the player with the help of the Guiding Voice. The character is customizable and will feature five different voices to choose from; male and female alike.
“They-They have ears! Ears like a cat! And, and, they’re lifting things with their mind-or, or is that magic? I-I don’t know!”
“Everybody keeps mentioning this ‘Darkfang’ person, who exactly were they and why is it everyone either reveres them or despises them?”
“I can’t exactly recall who I was before, but I was evidently a hero, and I am determined to continue being that for the people of Qumak!”
Your speaking tone and enunciation is very clear which is excellent. Try to introduce more inflection into your words and venture into a wider range of pitches, volumes, and tones as you go through the line. This is especially important in the first and third lines of dialogue.
Thanks for your feedback! I've taken a second crack at it which hopefully sounds better than the first