Passage of the Wanderer: A Firnuvan Tale
ryykal for The Wanderer
The definitive player character. Woke up in the middle of the Nimekal Woods alongside an unconscious Lumiya with no memory of the preceding events beforehand or even knowledge of the universe around them. They’re guided and defined by the choices actually made by the player with the help of the Guiding Voice. The character is customizable and will feature five different voices to choose from; male and female alike.
“They-They have ears! Ears like a cat! And, and, they’re lifting things with their mind-or, or is that magic? I-I don’t know!”
“Everybody keeps mentioning this ‘Darkfang’ person, who exactly were they and why is it everyone either reveres them or despises them?”
“I can’t exactly recall who I was before, but I was evidently a hero, and I am determined to continue being that for the people of Qumak!”
Your approach and tone is very good along with your timing on the lines. Largely, try to take a step back in terms of the exuberance of your portrayal. Especially on the first line, you blow out your mic several times which drastically affects the quality of the sound. As well, for a bit of weird advice, try taking a shower before you record. You have a little bit of strain in your voice that may clear up if you breath in some steam for a bit and clear your respiratory passages.
Thank you for the feedback! I'll be sure to keep these things in mind!