Hi, turbobagel! You have a fantastic voice for the character, but the inflection is a little off (which totally isn't your fault. I didn't give too much detail). It was a bit to emotive, and not as ominous. If you wouldn't mind, do you think you could do one in the same delivery style as the user christufano, who also did the audition, with the same voice you did for this one? I understand if not, but I'd like to here it!
Thanks, I'm glad you've taken interest! And that's no problem at all, I'll get right on it!