I do like the delivery on line 1 and how you give Halastair's voice a hint of uncomfortableness (he is injured here in the scene after flying home for hours so it fits!). I would say while the voice is very crisp and clean, Halastair's voice should be a hair or 2 deeper. Wit direction, I think lines 2 and 3 could be just a bit stronger (line 2 having more of an intimate nature and 3 sounding a bit more sincere). Otherwise, I do think you have a great voice, and it could work for a lot of characters!