New World Adventures EMERGENCY RECAST!
cordeux for Kevar
This is a submission, not an audition. If I like your lines, you will be in the book, and you'll get a copy of the book delivered to an address of your choosing. No further recording required.
Full context:
“I could show ya’ how ta wield it,” said the man holding a dagger to Gwenevere’s throat.
“Ya’ surrounded!” said Kevar, another fireball forming above his hand. “Give the girl or ya’ all die!”
Extra comments:
Kevar is cocky. He likes his job, and the thought of things not going exactly his way doesn't even occur to him. I know his lines don't sound that funny, but he still thinks he is. To really get in the zone for this role, think of the most fun and joyful day you've ever had at the expense of someone you've truly hated. That's the frame of mind you need to be in to play as Kevar.
Common error:
Tenfold is said "TENfold" not "tenFOLD". The "ten" is the important part, because it's different than being paid "ninefold" or "elevenfold". The folding bit isn't the important bit of tenfold.
“I could show ya’ how ta wield it,”
“She ain’t worth it matey. Run a long and tell ’em that Kevar is takin’ care of ‘er now. I know how much you was paid, but he’ll prolly pay us tenfold.”“Drop it dwarf! Or tell ya’ boss ya’ got ‘er killed!”"Huh!" (winded from being elbowed in the gut)
“Ya’ surrounded!” “Give the girl or ya’ all die!”
Definitely an improvement on the last one, but it still feels a little slow. Remember, you've got a knife to a woman's throat, and you're faced with a man with a crossbow, a dwarf with an axe, and a magical elf wizard. You know that you can easily be killed at any moment, and the only thing keeping you alive is the fact that when you die, you'll murder this woman with you. So much can go wrong here. That troublesome guard might think she's worth rescuing. If he thinks she's worth rescuing, you're dead. You'd better let him know that she ISN'T worth rescuing. Or that troublesome dwarf. He looks like he could kill at least three of your mates before going down himself. Better make sure he drops his weapon fast, or your team will be down three people for the next raid. Now the girl is gone! Hopefully it's not too late though. If you sound and act tough enough, they may just give her back without a fight, we can only hope. Speak too slow, you're dead.