Sorry, the background noise in this take is nasty-loud, the line itself peaked out the mic as the mic was not adjusted properly to yelling, and the yell itself sounded too quiet (not in terms of volume, but a person yelling as loudly has they can has a certain vocal strain that this audio lacks. This sounds more like a mild shout into a microphone that's way too sensitive.)

Damn! 53 auditions and only two directors have even bothered to reply to you. Listen to what the other director said. Once you understand how to adjust the gain on the microphone, your career chances go from "hell no!" to "maybe if you work very hard you may one day be successful". I'd also suggest investing in better recording equipment, record in a room with less hard walls, and getting more familiar with how to use recording software. I can tell you have a great voice, and 53 auditions shows that you're very dedicated, but that all counts for nothing if your equipment sucks and you don't even know how to use the equipment you DO have.

One skill you absolutely MUST have, is a way of knowing whether you peaked or not. Almost every audio software ever will tell you if you're peaking or not, but you need to know how to read it, because each one does it differently. If anything you do ever peaks, DO NOT SHOW ANYONE!!! DELETE IT FAST!!!