Operation: PGR Fandub Project
Joshua Lovell for Lee
The straight man and tech guy of the Gray Raven squad. He’s the most logical of the three in the Gray Raven, but don’t mistake it as him being cold; he’s a lot more caring than he lets on and it shows a lot when it comes to people he cares about, especially his younger brother Murray.
Midrange young adult male. Usually aloof/flat if not mildly snarky and lecturing, but capable of softening up in sincere moments. For voice reference, I’m looking more for something similar to his ENG performance.
Voice Reference:
- english
- male young adult
(lecturing/scolding) Yes, you did. But for this, you’ve been heavily wounded, our most important Commandant nearly died, and not only so, even Liv’s lost her combat capabilities.
(lecturing/caring) Don’t push yourself. Extended mind linking will cause you harm. How many times do I have to tell you?
(matter of fact) Leading the team? I’m more than qualified.
Thanks for resubmitting and taking into account what I've written in your feedback! You did a good job bringing more a scolding tone into that first line and I can definitely hear more of the frustration come out so I'm glad that the facial expressions and hand movements helped you out a bit more with delivering those lines! The second line was also nicely done where you sound more caring and even worried the way "doting" may sometimes sound, so these were nicely done!
The only thing I would also want to add for feedback is that I'd recommend a bit of adlibbing here and there in order to make your lines sound more alive and realistic. Things such as little sighs, grunts, laughing, etc -- whatever you think is best for the character and the line, I definitely recommend keeping those in your toolkit as something to add to spice up your audition, but aside from that, you did a nice job incorporating my directions into your delivery so I'm impressed!
A side thing but I also appreciate how timely you are in resubmitting so thank you very much ALSO for your time and effort into the project! While casting will not occur until after the deadline, I hope that we have a chance to work together whether it's in this project or in a future project. Wishing you the best in your future endeavors!
Yea once I read that it reminded me of the light chuckle from my first submission, mental note to remember actual vocal notions not just words. I appreciate the added input and will definitely keep that in mind. this truly does seem like a fun project and I hope we get the chance to work together as well be it for this or something down the road. If you would care for another resubmission with me incorporating adlib, I'll see what I can do. Either way, best wishes.
No worries about resubmitting again, only if you want to. These are just fine.