I feel like it might sound like I’m shouting at the listener, and that I’m talking too fast when reading out the phone number. I also think I have a good energy here, but might sound “surfer dude”-ish and maybe even a little fake. I think I also am in danger of sounding too monotone as I get further into the script, and sound like I’m rushing to get to the end as I lose my breath.

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