Heya! :DI assume you're a beginner by the Quality of it (not an Insult, we all started somewhere), so I advise you to try and keep the white Noise a little bit better in Check as its currently still very noticeable. ^^ That can be a Mic issue but it can usually be atleast mostly fixed by the DAW. :)Also you sound very hollow, so you have probably alot of flat, hard surfaces that bounce the Sound. Try to cover those up to make it sound alot cleaner. :Lastly, for the more technical VA side of things, you sound alot more like a Professor that just burned his own lab down but is very curious as to see how that worked and why. It doesn't really sound angry or confused at all and moreso like "How fascinating! What happened! :O :D" Which by itself isnt bad, just absolutely not what this role needs. Thank you for your time! ^^