Let me say this in the nicest way, You are a monster. This is almost perfect. Will let you know what happens at the end. Meanwhile if you would like to redo your lines for Jack I would like for you to go off the books and be the best you can be. GREAT WORK-JJ
you asking me to submit some improve line? i can do that if thats what your askin
Yes I would love to hear how crazy you can be. You will be fighting the main character in this scene. I will lay out the scene. "Scene plays as Jack the ripper just killed a women in the streets, He felt a precence in the air as he looks back he sees Maka Albarn.'' For jack She looks to him as she was a Waygu steak. He then gets excited