Hey Jared - thank you so much - I loved when you said DEMAND JUSTICE - it was a bit more intimate - and I think this need just a bit more intimacy. I felt like this unique storyline you were giving was great but it felt to FULL VOICED (almost announced to the person) instead of being motivating - I felt like you chose the full voice because he was about to go to a podium - but I think this character would have been served better if it was just a bit more intimate and less dramatic pauses - SOME GOOD CHOICES in here and loved your storyline. You are hard worker - and I think that shows in your work somehow - you make great choices but then you push them just a BIT farther than they need to be - you are like me - if I go less than I think - it will give me exactly what the client wants LOL - doesn't seem right - but it's a compliment because we are hard workers. so just trust in your storyline and dont' try to over prove your choices. I know that's not your intention - but that's how it comes across. Would love to direct this a bit so you could hear that slight change - cause you have the right idea here for sure.