It's an intriguing risk to experiment with a more inebriated read for your performance. However, I'm struggling to envision who exactly would be present at this open mic event. Are they fellow writers, artists, or perhaps employees from Hot Topic? Understanding your audience is key—are they familiar with your creative process and empathetic to your pain?

While the drunken read has its moments, notably until the line, "They couldn’t have been more wrong," I'm left pondering how the audience would react to such a raw and vulnerable outpouring. Would they feel uncomfortable, or would they nod in agreement with your sentiments? Once you have a clearer picture of your audience's potential reactions, you can tailor your performance to elicit the desired response.

Despite these uncertainties, it's commendable that you're willing to take risks and explore different approaches. Don't be too quick to abandon this angle—lean into it and see where it takes you. By refining your understanding of the audience and committing to your chosen direction, you'll elevate your performance and make it truly memorable.