Ok, few things. 1. Good job on doing your own character (Kinda of the original point of this) 2. You can also talk about yourself if you want 3. Again with the stuttering, (If it's a real problem you have I'am sorry) Maybe try doing taking some different tries/takes on recording or do something else to practice. 4. Can you turn the swearing down to a pg-13 or teen level, please.