I noticed a significant improvement in your pacing; you slowed down, which made the script more comprehensible and allowed for better engagement with the material. Great job on that front! However, there's still room for enhancing the emotional connection to the script. Consider delving into how the script makes your character feel. Do they have a personal connection or a particular opinion about the events involving Robin? Expressing these emotions can add depth and authenticity to your performance, making it more relatable and engaging for the audience. You've addressed the "who are you speaking to" aspect, which is excellent. Now, focus on the "why." Why is your character telling this story? How does it matter to them or their audience? Understanding the emotional context of the script can help you convey a more compelling and immersive performance. Lastly, remember to verify the pronunciation of words, such as "Ren," to ensure accuracy in your readings. Continue practicing, and you'll refine your skills even further.