You demonstrated good articulation, ensuring the words were clear and easily understood. However, to make the delivery more engaging, consider adding variety to your tone. Experiment with pitch changes, different energy levels, and varied inflections to bring more life to the read. I appreciated the way you portrayed Peter's emotions, with a sorrowful tone for his moments of depression and an upbeat tone when discussing his creations. To enhance the overall performance, consider projecting your voice more, especially since you tend to be soft-spoken. This will help add energy and impact to the delivery.