Halo: Celestia, A Halo Audio Drama (New Role Added!)
kifinosi for Thomas Darren
Thomas Darren is a young man whom was taken in by a cargo pilot whom runs shipments for anyone who pays. He is in his late teens or so, and has a bit of a guilt factor to his tone of voice. He is currently learning in a sort of internship under Captain Faux on how to be a pilot, and sees him as a sort of father figure. He can be relatively soft spoken to others, unless it is Leonard Copplin, whom he has a sort of sibling tone towards.
"Afternoon sir. Actually, I was thinking I will just obsere some more today, if it's all the same to you....I apologize for the inconvenience, sir. I'm just feeling a bit under the radar today."
(Alright, quick update on this line. I had a question about what this line is supposed to mean, so heres a explanation so it is easier to understand. So, in this scene, the ship is entering the planet's atmosphere. When the clouds dissapear and the crew is looking down to the planet's surface, one of the characters notes, "There she is. Beautiful, ain't she, kid?". To the rest of the crew, they've seen the planet plenty of times, and it's lost the effect on them. But for Thomas, someone who's never traveled around before, let alone to the Outer Colonies, he is awestruck by the beauty of the landscape. Imagine Rey from The Force Awakens when seeing 'so much green'. It's in a simular veign to that scene. Thomas, while being awestruck by the beauty he is seeing on the planet's surface, is slightly shocked that the other character doesn't sound more excited. If you have any questions about this line in particular, please feel free to ask me further.)
"Well, yeah. I've never seen this side of the colonies before."
(shocked)
"...You gave weapons to terrorists?..."
(panicing; Think you just spilled beer on your date during the first date)
"Oh my- I'm so sorry-"
A little to enthusiastic for this role. If you tone it down to more normal sounding conversation, I think it would sound better for the character.
Understood. I was indeed going for more of a chipper tone, like a pupil looking up to his mentor.
Yeah, you can make it sound as if he respects him, but like I said, these are ordinary people. They aren't very enthusiastic in their tone. Using regular tone of voice and passing as if you're talking to a friend is what I'm going with for the main characters. Nothing too fancy. Think of it almost as if they haven't gotten a lot of sleep and aren't all happy and cheery, you know?
Aahh, gotcha. For one, I really like how you offer constructive feedback on all of the auditions. I definitely feel that I better understand what you're looking for in terms of Darren's tone.
No problem. It's difficult to describe in words until you have an example sometimes. It doesn't mean anyone is a bad actor, just not the specific performance I need for the role. Everyone's welcome to try until they get it right, though. If I didn't give feedback, I wouldn't be doing it right, and the project would likely never really get started because I wouldn't care.
I see far too many projects where the creators don't care enough, so I'm really glad to see the pride you take in this. And awesome, I was hoping I'd be allowed to retry.
I also just uploaded some videos for each character explaining things a little more on my channel if you'd like to watch it.
Perfect! I'll be sure to check that out before auditioning again.
It's a playlist, so just go to the channel's playlist and chose the video you need.
I found your read of "Oh my- I'm so sorry-" to be quite good! The panic was very apparent and well conveyed.
Agreed.