Hana Thorns - Skyrim Follower and Quest mod
chadderbox for Manedaen Silinaine
These are actually all of his lines. ^^' His appearance is limited as an unlucky villain/victim.
He and his subordinates arrive at a location in the planned path of a scouting party that failed to report, only to find them slaughtered at the feet of the player. It was not a good day for Manedaen.
There is plenty of freedom for his tone, the keywords here are excentric or histerical, or both. A unique tone of voice, maybe haughty befitting a Thalmor, would suffice.
(shocked, disgusted) Just what happened and who ARE you! Did you do this!?
(outraged) Are you mad!? After murdering an entire scouting party that's your best excuse? You are all under arrest!
(from conflicted to enraged or histerical) No! NO! My cousin was one of them, you're not going to jail... no, you're dead! DEAD!
(enraged) For Faniiel, Raaargh!
Loved it. :P The only thing I'd need different is that line 1 and 2 are back to back. So "You are all under arrest!" needs to be in a more outraged tone than that dismissive tone to be followed with line 2. And you could play with the beggining of line 2 if you want, as the character is quickly changing it's mind from arrest to lethal force. I'm also considering changing this character from a single appearance into a "Team Rocket-esque" character. To later on add a bit of levity into more serious stories with short appearances laying out traps in his quest for revenge. Though this is probably much further down the line I should be able to write most of them in advance. Let me know if this is something that would work out for you.
Of course! I went a little lighter but i understand the direction. And i can continue further with additional future work.
Excellent! Thank you for auditioning. I'll put some thought into where I'd like to take this character and send you the script with a couple of added parting lines for once he's defeated.