Loved it. :P The only thing I'd need different is that line 1 and 2 are back to back. So "You are all under arrest!" needs to be in a more outraged tone than that dismissive tone to be followed with line 2. And you could play with the beggining of line 2 if you want, as the character is quickly changing it's mind from arrest to lethal force. I'm also considering changing this character from a single appearance into a "Team Rocket-esque" character. To later on add a bit of levity into more serious stories with short appearances laying out traps in his quest for revenge. Though this is probably much further down the line I should be able to write most of them in advance. Let me know if this is something that would work out for you.
Of course! I went a little lighter but i understand the direction. And i can continue further with additional future work.
Excellent! Thank you for auditioning. I'll put some thought into where I'd like to take this character and send you the script with a couple of added parting lines for once he's defeated.
