Your read was really good!! I liked that you went for the radio ad approach

Great read! Very clear and simple and effective. I think your self criticism is valid and one thing you could do about that is vary the tone of voice you use. It never hurts to mix things up a bit.

I think this was a great read, and the only thing that really stuck out for me was the last "52." It didn't quite feel...final? Maybe that's just how I heard it, but I half-expected you to keep talking.