VA 201 - Class 2 Homework Portal 2
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I invite your feedback, please shower me with your cacophonous critiques! and fervid feedback!!, here, let me begin the onslaught. I think the read was a bit dry emotionally and had too many mouth noises, it also kind of didn't have any special quality and the pace almost came across as a bit to rhythmic. tell me what else, please I beg of you.
Hey there, pretty good read overall. Here's what I thought: Good: When you let loose and said "music video dance par-tay" was memorable. It give you a bit more personality vs. the rest of the more straight-laced read. Would like to see more of that sprinkled throughout. You got a good voice for commercial work and your enunciation was great. Bad: There were some issues with volume throughout like "in Thornton" was super quiet and it's a pretty important piece of info so you wouldn't want someone to miss that. I found some pacing choices a bit odd as well like when reading the phone number at the end (first time) it sounded like you felt like you had to vary up the pace artificially and it made the "5252" feel out of place compared to the "555-752" right before it . Watch for mispronunciations like "Feb-u-ary" (wrong) VS. "Feb-RU-ary". Also when ramping up the enthusiasm, watch out for what comes after. For example when you said "and a free lunch" after the dance party thing, it came off as a bit comical since one was so extreme and the other was so timid by comparison.
thank you for your feedback, it is apricated, the overall tone remaining mostly the same was in my case purposeful as I pictured this as a very made for radio kind of schtick. so adding immediate energy on the pizza party bit, then I added a personal inflection with the "free lunch bit" because I know how very few "free lunches" are actually worth a Damn, and wanted to take a bit of the draw away from it. the reading the numbers on the other hand are a definite problem for me, my pronunciation of February may not be to your liking but it is still not per se incorrect, it may not imply a great learning situation depending on where you stand on that point but i actually never hear people actually pronounce the R all that much, and as such don't at this time view that as a bad thing, of course if I knew more about this supposed client for said project, perhaps I would have changed it to the more historically accurate Feb-RU-are instead of using the more common use. thank you again for your impute, I hope I receive even more feedback from others (not to say your wasn't enough, I just want a plethora of opinions.)
Very solid read. Nice job. Everything sounded good although the fifty-two fifty-two part sounded a bit weird to me for some reason. A very minor criticism.
Thank you very much for your feedback, I appreciate it. Yeah I have a bit more difficulty with things like phone numbers, I tend to process it a bit slower in my head and it can lead to uneven, almost jarring pause and start. I guess I should probably work on that a bit.