You did a good job! I like the energy a lot, well done. Your accent is fantastic! John tals about this a lot, but accents are absolutely a boon in VO. If you want to talk about it more, feel free to reach out. Overall, the energy present here is definitely the strongest part of the read, but I do think you could take your time to let this energy expand and grow. Some words were difficult to understand, and I believe the reason is because sometimes your pacing/energy would pick up in speed. Aside from that, I did hear a few moments where the audio cut, so make sure you include the entire raw file! I loved the ending as well. This was a really solid performance, you definitely should have some more faith in yourself! Take your time to let your words and energy breathe, because as it is now, it's a bit quick-paced which can give off the impression that it's fake when done in this way. Good job!