I really loved the energy you put in here. I can imagine you smiling doing the whole thing. Really gave that commercial vibe. As far as critique goes, I noticed two things. Your pronunciation of "purchases" could be a little clearer. Secondly, I did hear quite a few peaking here and there, so make sure to step a little bit away from the mic or lower the gain. Great job!

I love how the pacing became faster during those long sentences. I can tell you really started to get more comfortable in it the further you went along. The commercial voice really felt like I was listening to an infomercial, too, I love it!

Great voice! I like the unique take you brought into this performance. I do think that your projection suffered, partially because of the way you were bringing this character to life, but it was only an issue at the beginning and various points in the script. Your articulation was up and down; sometimes really clear, and sometimes pretty muddled. Obviously the faster pace made this happen even more consistently, so try not to go so fast that your words become hard to understand. The energy is solid, don't let up on this going forward into the next homeworks! Great job.