I like your pacing a lot! I can tell you are REALLY emphasizing your enuniation, and while obviously this wouldn't quite work for a regular audition, it's perfect for practicing your articulation. Make sure you pronounce "Bromwich" correctly, you have to look these words up before recording! I would have liked a bit more energy, something more to hook me into the scene you are describing, but the otne nad performance felt ovrrall solid to me. Nice job! Keep up the good work, you're definitely making a ton of improvement!