But that writeup tells me you really tried some things and judged what was working and what wasn't. That's GREAT! You should be and its not a waste of time, it's the prep and rehearsal so you can uncover and try what you end up doing. That is so important, well done. For the performance here; good diction, and the pace allows us to follow and understand. You have a good ear for that. Most of all it feels natural and positive. I think you've got a great option here.