Good work! I would love to hear you add more energy to your entire performance. The foundation is definitely there, but I definitely think you could add more energy to keep your audience engaged and continuously excited. This kind of passion is absolutely vital, especially for children's narrations like this script. From there, work a little more on your articulation, always keeping it at the forefront. This can be helped by slowing down just a bit with your voice overall, focusing on pronouncing (and even overarticulating) each sound. Well done!