Your articulation was honestly solid considering how fast you were going! However, words like "little" "Peter" and "Padderton" feel flat compared to other words. Remember to pronounce every single sound to the fullest extent to really work out these important VO muscles. The read feels way too fast paced to be a children narration; the passion and excitement is there, but you're moving from one place to another too quickly for me to really feel the story to the fullest (this could also partially be due to the editing). Overall, slow your pacing down quite a bit, and focus on each and every sound to really bring out your voice in this performance. Nice job overall, keep at it!