I love your voice! It has a nice and low quality that can fit a variety of voices. My main criticism is the lack of articulation in this read. I could clearly understand what you were saying, but when it comes to narration style reads like this, speaking every single word and sound extremely clearly and thoroughly is extremely important. "Peter" instead of "Pe-er" is just one example; try practicing reads while overarticulating to really work that muscle of your VO skillset. Overall, this was a great read, just keep finding ways to improve!