Hey, nice read! Good enunciation and pronunciation. The recording is a little quiet so it's hard to hear the full range of emotion in your voice but overall good job :)

The foundation is definitely here! Try projecting more; at the moment, it sounds almost like you are whispering with your voice as low as it is. It's not a matter of audio level (I can still understand you), but the tone feels off for a narration-style read like this. When it comes to children's stories and that area of VO, passion and excitement is essential. Use your entire body to sell your performance. From there, keep working on your articulation and breathing. These sounded nice, so your primary focus should be your energy levels and projection. Well done overall!