Clear readings throughout, with a some slight hesitations with some phrases and words. It might be the sudden lack of breath or just unsure of the flow of words. In many cases, it is really about practice. True story; I was born with a stutter when I young. ;-)

Nice read! My advice for you is to REALLY focus on your articulation. It's one of the strongest aspects of a voice actor, and probably the number one thing that clients and casting directors look for in potential work. For the homework, we would even love it if you over-articulated so that you can practice that muscle of your work. peTer / liTTle / harry poTTer / peTer peTTigrew / and even your other non-T sounds could be clearer with a bit more effort and practice. Overall though, the spirit of the script is still present, and your energy is a nice foundation for what you are bringing to the table! Well done.