Your take on this read definitely takes me back to my 1st grade reading circle! To my ear it sounds like you start to lose a little energy while listing the animals he drew once he got up. However, you regained it quickly after. I enjoyed it :)

That gradual build-up of energy and enthusiasm while describing Peter started doodling is great! Nice transition!

I really like the excitement you bring right from the beginning of the read! Your pacing is also extremely solid; not fast but also not dragging to the point where it is boring to listen to. Your voice is unique and strong, and overall I felt like your articulation was extremely clear. Just make sure to never let down your energy, and even perhaps build upon your previously established energy while continuing the story (I did feel pieces of this currently!). Overall, this was a wonderful read!