You have a nice voice, the read felt a little stiff like a business audio. my suggestion is to try and be more casual or relaxed.

Your energy is solid, definitely on the right track! Try to articulate your "T" sounds more, especially with words like "Peter" and "little." With the rest of the read, I really felt your strong and clear voice all the way throughout and I was impressed by how natural you flowed through the story! I think you could throw just a bit more passion and excitement to make the read less monotone, but with that you currently have, it 100% fits the style of read we are looking for. Great stuff!