I could really picture the story unfold as you read. And, I had a smile on my face half way through after "Depressed." Your enunciation sounded good, too. It might just be my ears, but there was a part at the last paragraph that may have been a bit fast, "Doing what he loved." Awesome read!

What a fun and gentle read! A nice pacing coupled with a great voice and tone. Woot!

This felt like such a natural choice for a narration read! Your voice fits this style of script perfectly. My main piece of advice for you is to focus just a bit more on your articulation, especially at the beginning. Obviously you don't want to over-articulate to the point where you sound unnatural, but for reads made for kids, having a strong clarity with each sound is one of the main strengths clients look for. Your gentle tone is easily your strongest part of the take, and combined with your solid flow and consistent pace, this makes for one of the strongest reads I've heard. Well done!