*** I can hear your room *** My first suggestion is setting up sound dampeners around your mic (i.e. pillows, blankets, clothes). It sounds like you are recording in a sound reflective environment. Do what you can make that environment less reflective. ||||||||| *** I can hear background noise *** Anywhere you record will have ambient background noise. That background noise may not match up with or distract from recordings on a given project (i.e. other voice actors, music, sfx, etc.). If you're familiar with Audacity, you can use the "Noise Reduction" effect that comes with it. If you've never used a DAW (Digital Audio Workstation) before, I recommend Audacity. It's free and has lots of community tutorials to get you started like these ones for Noise Reduction: (Windows) https://youtu.be/-AF5RVRwD8I, (MAC) https://youtu.be/10FFKl_0GSA. If you already use a different DAW, it should have a way to reduce noise. ||||||||| *** Performance's Intention Does NOT Need to Match the Words *** Feel free to make different choices. Right now it sounds like a variety of wonder bread with no jam, and I think you've got jam. 'Advertising Lullaby" is an incessant string of ridiculous buzzwords, and you can put whatever intention you want into it: To charm, To tease, To block, To beg, To threaten, To kill, To make love, etc, etc. To quote Deb, "It's not the word. It's the intention that matters." Make choices. Sometimes they will be strange. Sometimes they will seem too normal or 'flat'. Regardless, commit to them and see where they take you. Your style will emerge. ||||||||| *** Enunciation *** Enunciation isn't bad but it could be clearer. I recommend doing some voice articulation exercises before you record. Sometimes I'll read whatever's in front of me and just over-enunciate. Then, when I go to record I'll dial back the over-enunciating and find a clear-sounding middle-ground.

Great job here! I really liked your pacing. Taking it a bit slower and doing your best to nail that articulation is key to a successful read, especially with tricky scripts like this. My advice for you is to now work on projecting your voice more! Breathe from your gut and hone your voice into a powerful voice that really fills up the "auditorium" you are standing on. Overall, very nicely done. - Joe, CC TA