OOOOOOH! I loved the dramatic pause surrounding "nothing changed" that delivery was soooo good! I actually felt the goosebumps! I really like this read. There were several distinct style changes in your line reading. An optomistic proclaimation in the begining, then a sarcastic remark on how there was no great federation and there were still wars, then more remorseful tone at the end when describing the waring state of the colonies. You can even stand to lean further into this stylistic change, bringing even more out of the differences between these passages to really drive the messages home. Fantastic read!

Great work!! I like your emphasis and pauses, they add a lot of personalization into the script which is fantastic. Don't be afraid to take some of those tougher words a bit slower to really nail that articulation. My favorite part of the take (aside from your excellent pacing) is the way you slow down near the end, add more emotion to your voice, and convey that sense of sadness and loss. Very nicely done!