Your soft voice adds a lot to the emotional value of the read! I can tell you gave a lot of thougt to the tone you are using for the script. Your pacing further adds to this. I think the one main thing that would improve this take would be to add some more energy at certain areas of the script to make it feel more emotional; you don't have to be yelling, but maybe adding a slight emphasis on certain words or pausing more to reflect (as you already do) would elevate it all. Overall, phenomenal job!