This audition is disqualified for a few reasons. The chief reason, and the only I'll cover to save myself some time, the background noise. It's just very intolerable. Most of it is in part to a bad microphone, the rest is due to your environment.
OK, I see well thank you for the feedback.
Yeah, a blue yeti microphone is sorta the standard for voice acting. I would also recommend noise-suppressing your room or finding a more enclosed space for voicing, like your car or something.