Loser With A Pen
auditioning for
Writer
in Controlled: An Original Audio Drama
While I do like the story, it's a little confusing and grammatically all over the place. For the future, I would suggest making your story more concise, more clear and with better grammar. Cheers! :D
Thanks for the feedback but I was doing a quick audition to see how quickly I could write a story, I have used this example in many of my auditions and made it in 6 mins.