Bronze Pyramid Casting Part II
Brian Walsh for Jyorris Sullivich / The Skeleton Man
Jyorris Sullivich is insane, his personality warped and twisted. At one point he was a kind and loving man who was both well respected and beloved by both his friends and family. However, things changed after an incident involving an ancient artifact known as the Ark'Illianor, which soon began to take over his mind, twisting him and warping him into a deranged, sadistic, psychopath who has no issues with killing and murdering others. There are however brief moments, where Jyorris gets to break free from the Ark'Illianor, where he gets to be human again. But during these moments, all he can feel is sorrow and pain for the sin he has burned into the world.
There is always such sweet silence, when all that is around you is the dead.
Oh...do you think it’s your nightmare...Amelia...this isn’t your nightmare...it’s mine...you’ve just been pulled in…
[We can hear the whirring of an electronic bone saw as Jyorris walks toward her.]
But I've had this nightmare playing out in my head for ages...always ending the same way...you know, like one of those nightmares where everyone's dead...except in this one I'm always looking down, and in my hands is the weapon…
[he looks down at the electronic bone saw.]
Oh look...there it is...the weapon...ah...this is that part of the nightmare isn’t it
*Sorrowful, preparing for his own death*
Ami...I'm sorry, I'm so sorry...I'm doing it again...I'm leaving you alone, all alone...
Other than Mispronunciations (which actually gave me a good laugh XD (Amelia is pronounced the same way as Amelia Earhart, Ami is pronounced Amy, ) this was an excellent approach. I enjoyed how you used tones and edges of various words to carry his personality throughout his dialogue. You kept him from being Joker-esq in his madness, and instead opted for a more sinister personification with him (which is what was intended <3). The thing about The Skeleton Man, is that, although he is twisted and insane, he is also sick. The part of him that is human has been dragged deeper and deeper into his inner darkness by his own personal Daemons. There are times when this part of him drifts up, where he becomes aware of what he's doing, and all at once the building guilt strikes, and he brakes down, only to once again be consumed by those Daemons. He is unstable, and his mentality can flip on a dime. Going from an evil mastermind to a mentally ill individual whose mind really isn't his own.