Gain is okay. It's extra noise that's the problem. With my headphones, I can hear echoes and microphone pops. Idk about the echoes; but a good way to eliminate microphone pops without shelling cash or needing to edit is to simply make sure your mic isn't directly in front of your mouth. Have the mic and your mouth a bit to the side of each other. If you're using a headset like I do, just bend the microphone part a bit away from your mouth. Especially avoid getting so close to the mic that you can practically make out with it. Helpful?
The gain is significantly better than last time. But as she said reverb and popping are a bit of an issue. As for the actual delivery, do you think you could change the voice of the first line to be deeper, and a bit playful? For the second and 3rd lines, could you make her overly enthusiastic?
