Would you please do a retake with these changes? If possible without sacrificing too much quality, reduce the white noise. For the last line, say it quieter with more resentment to better fit as "grumbled," which is how it is described in the text. Again, if possible, make the voice just a little scratchy.
Voice Actor
Yona based on the My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic TV series. This story takes place during season 8. The season acts as a backdrop or is notably changed throughout the chapters.
Yona is a young yak and member of the Student Six. In chapter 5, the six friends get caught in a fear snare that Rainbow Dash instinctively casts while revealing herself as a master mev. Yona is an honest and sincere character who references herself in the third person.
The Audition Lines here are the sum of what she says for this project. UPDATE/CORRECTION: She has only two extra lines ("That what Sandbar told us," and "Why not?") beyond the audition lines here.
Chapter Appearances with dialogue:
Chapter 05 - The Fear Snare
Sample Dialogue from the actual My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic TV show: https://youtu.be/KuBak-7AD0U?t=37
There is an audition example from me on this role to give actors an idea of what I have in mind.
All our teachers act weird already.
(Context: The Student Six are having a discussion during their school lunch break. Ocellus has noticed that Twilight Sparkle is not using her magic. Smolder remarked that is weird. Gallus asks if any of the others are acting weird. Yona follows up with this line. It is muttered but soon followed by a friendly smile in text.)
Or we could ask Professor Dash since she right there.
(Context: The Student Six are deciding how best to approach and ask Twilight about her not using her magic. Sandbar points out it is a rude question. Gallus and Smolder still favor asking her since something might be wrong. Gallus decides he'll do the asking, and the others can back him up. Rainbow Dash happens to fly by the group around this time, so Yona offers up the idea of asking her instead.)
Yona not like what you did, Master Dash.
(Context: This is after Gallus breaks the group out of a fear snare Rainbow Dash cast. Rainbow Dash has confessed to the Student Six that being a master mev is a new thing for her. She sensed their fear, trapped them, and fed on that fear on an instinctual level. Yona freely admits here she did not like Rainbow Dash doing that. This statement is grumbled, but there should be no sarcasm for the "Master" part. The reason she uses the "Master" title is that Gallus used the word to break them out of the snare and told Ocellus to use it, especially if scared.)
