I do not mind although I was actually already very impressed by your first submission. I like your delivery of the first line here even better though I have noticed there is a stark difference in volume between the two submissions. I would prefer that, the volume, to be more like the first one or a happy medium between the two. You don't have to do a retake as I have faith that can be managed. Rest assured, overall, you're doing great! I want to wait on finalizing things until the deadline, so I can hear from more actors.
It's much better now that it is quieter in the re submission.