Future Diary of a Wimpy Kid (Future Diary Abridged)
SilverSlipped for Yukiteru Amano
The protagonist of this abridged episode. Yuki is a coward who is just trying to get through his day while avoiding the advances of your normal, everyday stalker. He is thrown into a death game unknowingly where he uses his phone to predict the future to get an advantage over his opponents. The problem is, every participant has a power like that!
We are looking for a cowardly/socially-awkward type of tone for him.
P.S. It's cause-ality, guys.
(Realizing, then stupidly happy) Wait a second I have the powers of causality at my whim… What should I do with it? CHEAT AT MATH!! YAY!!!!
(Running away, terrified) A hot girl is chasing me! I can’t believe that 4chan chain post was right! The hottest girl in school is trying to kill me with calculus!
Good takes. I liked them both. I think you might have been a bit too close to your mic on the 2nd line though. But I love the direction you took the second line with your hesitation on the end of it!
Thanks so much for the feedback!