Hello GangstaGandalf! Love the username haha, so you have a good mic and quality. Just some honest feedback...I thought some of the lines were a little over emphasized. This character is someone who speaks in a calm, but eerie matter. He needs to say it low, creepy and sorta ominous

I also felt you rushed through the lines as well. Take the time to undertsand the charcater, even if it takes you a half hour to get the character down, read through it and understand them. But otherwise good start! You did take the emotions as though he was angry and shouting which I understood! Thank you for auditioning and I hope my advice helped!