Warhammer 40K Fan Story - The Heathen's Intent part 1
KieranVA for Falonious (read Description)
Description: (Voice will not be edited)
Falonious: The planetary governor of Kalden Prime, has lived in comfort mostly since his time as governor. Is more of a talker than an action taker, is more likely to send someone else to do his deeds than himself. Considers the item value before the lives at stake, but is highly capable of running a world. Is strategic and capable of being a commander when needed. Has a hidden agenda and is not afraid send others off to avoid it being known.
* I ask that you reference the game Dawn of War 1-3 to get an understanding of the speech patterns and accent. I know its a lot to ask but I promise it will make sense once you start to comprehend the personalities portrayed in the Warhammer 40K universe.
* Here is a reference for the his character -
(Said to Maldus right after making demands and wanting to add one final request as Maldus walks away) Maldus.. I do hope you deal with this swiftly and as silent as the wind. The citizens of Gaazna do not meet war heroically, they tend to fear it.
(Said in response to Maldus's question, unsure of the outcome of his response) (with hesitation) I.. I have
(Said to a servitor after accidently initiating communications) No, no! Disregard that, off damn you! (grunts in frustration) Where’s the blasted techpriest? They’re never around when you need them.
*Extra lines -
I know nothing of it.. why do you ask?
It was but suggestion Vulkaar.
If they reach the relic then that means the worse is yet to come!
(Said to a general after hearing news of the orks gettig the relic. Knowing the orks are about to use the relic against the space marines) Send the vindicare, send the ogryn, send anything available!
This was to be an simple task, Maldus! It was to be simple!
I will give you my honest opinion based on the character you tried for, you are welcomed to message me to discuss it further if you disagree with my idea: For some reason when i listen to these lines i feel like the character is plotting lol its not a bad thing, ultimately this character does indeed plot against the imperium but its just the first thing that comes to mind. I kind of really like how you said the first line, there are only minor directions id make to that line because of how id like it said but the first line stands out to me a lot because you really captured the idea i had for this character overall. The first line was said by this character to Maldus to kind of hint that he wanted Maldus to take precaution beyond reasonable measure to ensure they are silent to the public. I dont know man I just really like how it sounded, gets that "I want you to disregard your own safety if you have to" feel which is perfect. The rest of the lines except the ending are pretty good, only direction and a one on one with you about how lines are said is the only real corrections id have for anything. The last lines however, the simple task part, you almost got that same feel from the first lines, which is good. At that point when hes telling Maldus it was to be simple, Maldus already figures out the character is a traitor and the character was frustrated but in keeping with that plotting tone because Maldus doesnt fully know everything yet. I liked it my dude! I hope you stay in contact because this will be a 5 part story and I believe you have a voice for a role, I just need to write it lol I hope this feedback is welcomed lol also Im not a professional in voice acting, I'm going solely based on what Id like for this character to sound like so please dont be discouraged in any way. Stay in touch for future projects because i have lots to go around and could use a good voice actor
Thanks for the honest opinion! I'm glad my effort into trying express your character didn't go unnoticed! I'll be sure to keep an eye out for your projects when they pop up in the future.