Warhammer 40K Fan Story - The Heathen's Intent part 1
VirginVergil for Drammon Tigelis (Read description)
Description: (Voices will be edited as they are wearing helmets that use audio amplifiers, unless they have their helmets off)
DRAMMON TIGELIS: Assault Marine (Mostly laid back/Talkative finds the joy but doesnt hesitate to focus on the objective) - The squad’s assault marine, is usually seen plunging into the battle right after TAETHIOS has deemed it appropriate. Usually the second one into a situation, speed and aggression define his warrior style. Held in great regard for arial combat with both the jump pack and the ravens fold (pack that allows hovering). Will rarely hesitate on an action as his word is final when he speaks, but is always willing to listen to others suggestions. Has high respect for TAETHIOS as he sees him as a blood brother due to being recruited on the same planet. Is more willing to invite the chaotic battle and relish in the moment, appreciating the coordination of the squad. He pursues the enemy when TAETHIOS initiates an ambush, preventing any who try to escape the horrific slaughter.
* I ask that you reference the game Dawn of War 1-3 to get an understanding of the speech patterns and accent. I know its a lot to ask but I promise it will make sense once you start to comprehend the personalities portrayed in the Warhammer 40K universe.
* Here is a generic reference for the space marine characters -
(Said with a hint of laughter) A raiding party without a warband? They grow either brave or dumb.
(Said with eagerness to kill the enemy) Hurry brother! They must feel the Emperor’s blessing!
(After being given the order to destroy the enemy) Finally!
*Extra lines - The sounds of combat
Charge!
Kill the beasts!
Die scum!
Taking fire!
You will die this day!
Open fire!
Sounds of swinging a sword/throwing a punch
I will give you my honest opinion based on the character you tried for, you are welcomed to message me to discuss it further if you disagree with my idea: There are some major differences between the "My faith is my shield, walk softly and carry a big gun" and the rest of the lines. Just wanted to point that out, its not bad but a noticeable difference, I like the smoothness of those lines by the way. But! How it started reminded me of a anime ive seen, cant think of it but the character im reminded of had this arrogance to him. The way you said dumb during that line was a bit much in my opinion, the rest of that line are good though. overall you did good for the character, i say the only real lines that I dont fully agree with here are the ending lines. The ending lines were almost overwhelmed with that gargle sound and you forgot to add a few sounds for combat purposes during the story. ITS NOT A MAKE OR BREAK ISSUE im just pointing out what i noticed. I hope this feedback is welcomed lol also Im not a professional in voice acting, I'm going solely based on what Id like for this character to sound like so please dont be discouraged in any way. Stay in touch for future projects because i have lots to go around and could use a good voice actor