The Breakfast Club Alternate Version (9M/8F)
bpeppler for Andrew "Andy" Clark
Bio: A Known Varsity Letterman Member of Shermer High's Wrestling Team. A Cool, Confident and Atheletic young man who tries to be a good Role Model for his fellow students. While he is a tad bit nicer to Claire and Brian he is still very confrontational with Bender though. However despite how often he and Bender would argue he often does try to be the Voice of Reasons amongst his fellow classmates in Detention though.
1. (Annoyed with a little bit of Sarcasm) Gee thanks anyways my name is not Sporto, its Andy. Are we clear on that?
2. (Friendly but with a slight touch of smugness) Ah thats a nice name, Im Andrew Clark Im a Varsity Letterman for the Schools Wrestling Team.3. (Awkwardly uncertain but tries to sound pleasant) I see So What's your Poison? *Awkward Silence* You probably already know that I am from the Varsity Wrestling Team, so ever watched any of the Wrestling Matches? *More Silence* Ever watched any of the sports games here at School?
4. (Annoyed but Authoratative) Forget it Bender, were through listening to you. Alright you two lets get back to the Detention Room and Ill lead the way. Bender got us into this mess so I might as well be the one to get us out of it.5. (Calm and Soothing) Calm down Claire, I never said you were repulsive, look Claire; yes you may come from a family that has more money than most people. But that doesnt change the fact that you are still a human being who has feelings like the rest of us.
6. (Smug at first but then sincerely fascinated) Eh heh heh, really, first of all Bender, you, Wolverine? AHAHAHAHAHA At best youre a Hawkeye and even then thats a BIG stretch Though on the other hand the idea of being Cyclops now that could be cool. I mean think about it the lean, fit athletic man who is a brilliant tactician, great aim with his optic blasts and is also a skilled martial artist. After all Cyclops is the original field leader of the X-men which is still one of the most renowned Comic Book Superhero teams of all time. So yeah I would be honored to be more like Cyclops from the X-Men.
First of all sorry for not responding sooner anyways... + Your delivery for the lines were for the most part pretty good, I particularly liked your take on the last two lines - Your voice for the role is not bad but a little light and serviceable and your delivery on Line 3 was a bit stiff and odd though. Overall this was pretty good.
I was trying to go for a more comforting tone on the third line. Thanks for the input! :)